Monday 21 September 2015

BEAUTIFULLY FLAWED, PART 56

BEAUTIFULLY FLAWED


PART 56





You’re lucky; your injuries aren’t that bad. You’ll be discharged in the evening.

Neither the doctor’s injection stung Geet’s sour skin nor did his words reached her ears. She lay on bed staring at the ceiling, thinking entirely nothing. Her mind was a blank void, having no thoughts just a dull ache that refused to leave n promised to forever be a part of her wretched existence. She wanted it to be a part of her existence.

Do you want to- umm, don’t you have any relatives that would want to see you?

No. Geet didn’t know who was taking care of her hospital bills or why she hadn’t yet been thrown on the road. My baby is completely fine, right?

Yes, you can come to me anyti-

I’ll leave by the evening. She cut him off. Taking the hint the doctor walked out of the room. Just as he left someone else came in.

Dadimaa held the same extreme hatred in her eyes, but the mad glint Geet had earlier witnessed was gone. She looked calmer n so much more cold somehow. So, what are you planning to do now? Geet met the tears n scorn in Dadimaa’s old eyes but said nothing. I want you gone. I don’t want your shadow to even flicker on what have remained of my family. Just tell me how much money you want n get lost. Don’t even dare associate your name with Maan’s or-

I’ll go. I don’t want money, I just have a few things at our place in Delhi, I will take those n leave.

You mean Maan’s place?

For Geet it would always be her n Maan’s home but she didn’t have the wish or energy to deal with Dadimaa who thought she would put claim on Maan’s property. Yes… Maan’s place. A sudden ripple of pain struck her as she said his name n realized he wouldn’t ever be there to hear it. Closing her eyes she tried to breathe n not scream in agony.

I will have someone take you there. Pick up your things n never show me your face again. If I saw you again, I will kill you… Dadimaa sniffed, wiping tears with a handkerchief then regaining her composure. Like you killed my grandchildren.

The verbal reminder was all it took for Geet’s fake n barely-held exterior to slip n tears come flooding out. She turned away from Dadimaa n laid on her side, wishing to turn the time back n dying instead of Maan n Nikita.

Once you are gone for good, I’ll have that curse-of-kid taken back to the orphanage.

Manan? No, you can’t send him to the orphanage.

Why don’t you keep him then?

Keep him? Geet didn’t want to keep herself. How will she take care of the Manan? She didn’t deserve that little angel. But she was going to have a baby. She was going raise him, would it be fair to Manan if she decided to be a mother to one child and leave another- only because he had already taken birth in the world? Manan had just gotten a true family, only to lose it completely? He had called her maa n she had promised him her love. Geet didn’t know what to do. Maan had left her bereft, lost and stunned.

What happened now? I know the real face of bitches like you. Don’t try to act over-smart with me.

I will keep him. Geet said; her words surprisingly strong.

After a momentary pause, Dadimaa narrowed her eyes. Okay. She waited, as if expecting Geet to back out. That didn’t happen. He is in the city; I will have Divya bring him to the hospital before you are discharged. The adoption will be complicated but consider that done too. You would be able to leave for Delhi the following day.

With that Dadimaa walked out. An hour later Manan came with Divya who was silently sobbing. Maa… Manan came to her looking confused and crying. Accident…

Geet didn’t know if he was asking or telling. She rose, helped him climb the bed and hugged him tight. Manan fisted her hospital gown, his grip hurting her back but his embrace was the first touch of light she felt on her after the loss that ripped apart her-their-world. Don’t cry- As she said it she cried herself. Her tears were scaring Manan because he pulled back, looking into her eyes for answers. Where dad is?

He is… he is somewhere very safe, baby. She said breaking down. Please take him out. She told Divya who thankfully did as requested without a word.

I want stay. He said panicking; catching the vibe that something was wrong, although his young brain couldn’t figure it was death that was wrong.

We will, Manan. But please go out with Dadi for now.





It was difficult time, Manan got that. His new mother wasn’t chatty anymore n she didn’t smile her weird smile anymore too. She looked white like sick people did; maybe that was the reason she was in hospital but somebody said something about accident. Manan didn’t know. Nobody told him anything. Dad was gone. Surely to one of his offices, near or far. He had many offices at many places.

Manan’s new mother was crying a lot, he didn’t like when people cried, specially his mother. It was sad, n very scary, it frightened him- like something bad was happening or was about to happen n he had to cry too.

But his new mother hadn’t cried before sitting on the aeroplane or on it. She was just quiet. So Manan stayed quiet too. She said they were going to Delhi, where his father lived. He didn’t know why they were going there because he had already gone there once. And only once he went there during vacations.

Dad wouldn’t be there, his mother told when he asked if they were going to meet him because he couldn’t come to them. And then she was quiet again. He liked her better before. Maybe she was really very sick. She even had a bandage on her head. They got off the aeroplane n went to his father’s house. Nina was there but she wasn’t happy, her eyes also had tears. They were not going to stay there at his father’s house, his mother told before going upstairs.

Nina had made yummy burger for him but she was sad. After eating he went upstairs to see where his new mother was but he stopped at the door. Seeing his new mother on the floor crying loudly holding something to her chest, he started to cry too. She looked at him n Manan thought she was angry because her eyes were apple red. But she didn’t scream. She wiped her cheeks n walked to him on knees with a tiny curve of lips. Will you help me pack? He nodded and they packed. While packing Maan saw that it was his father’s photo that his mother was holding before n crying.

Where we are going?

Somewhere very far.

Dad, coming us with?

No, he… isn’t. His mother’s voice was so thin he almost missed the words.

Before leaving Nina hugged him, telling she would really-really miss him n she was very sad. He left every time but she was never this sad. She also hugged his mother n then they took a taxi which stopped in front of very tall building. In one of those moving carts that made your head spin they went up in the building.

We are there, somewhere far?

No. This is my friend’s place. We’re here for help, to reach our somewhere far. His mother rang the bell n door opened. Manan hid shyly behind his mother’s leg, because he had never seen the man before.

Geet, what are you- Who is that behind you?

Shaan, this is my son, Manan. Can we come in?



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A/N:
My banked parts end here. Few more parts are left of BF, but I wont promise when I will update next.

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52 comments:

  1. What a point to stop!!! what happened to Maan and Nikita.....please say Dadi is faking it all and that both are injured but alive!

    I am commenting on this story for the first time but this is your best story for me...I have read all the parts several times and the time when u didnt update this story...I often came back to check if you updated. i was super excited to see you back...posting this story. Please dont stop and please update as soon as you can.

    It is the most poignant, painful, loving yet somewhat real story I have read recently. The roller coaster love story of maaneet is simply beautiful. Maan 's unconditional love for Geet and her desire to save him from all evil brings tears to my eyes. All the recent updates you made are as beautiful as the previous ones...every word conveys the depth of feeling maaneet have for each other.

    You are a very talented writer....each story of yours is different from the other. I have immensely enjoyed them. Thank you for keeping maaneet alive and all these lovely stories.

    Waiting very very eagerly ....for the rest of the story.

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    1. I am so happy that you thought of leaving a comment. Its your fav!!! :D thanks a lot

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  2. I want to shout and scream at you.. wat the hell happened yaar... i do not think maan is dead coz dadima.. she was just waiting to get rid of manan and geet but maan is not dead.. she is using this and his critical condition to get geet and manan out of his life but will he ever find them back.. will he know geet is just not his wife anymore but she is carrying his baby and he does not even know about them.. does divya not know about maan and nikita... wats all this coz dadima's behavior is quite weird and thank god geet has shaan coz watever it is he will help tehm to have a better life and keep them safe.

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    1. Now u understand how u torture us in ur ff di :P hum pe kya beet tein hain ๐Ÿ˜Ÿ๐Ÿ˜Ÿ๐Ÿ˜Ÿ

      But I'll must say... Osheen beat u in this jhadkass!!!! ๐Ÿ˜ž๐Ÿ˜ž๐Ÿ˜ž

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  3. Hey there...
    really a sad and emotionally update...i normally don't comment but i felt like i had 2 this time as u take out so much time 4 us readers and update the stories despite ur busy life...

    i feel like daadi is lying to geet about maan and nikita's death and maybe there will be a leap of some years and we will get 2 see maan and geet's grownup chlid and daadi lying 2 maan and saying that geet died in that accident....to be honest plz dont do that coz it will be like some silly old story the one that everyone knows what going to happen...instead i want u 2 SURPRISE ME!!!....

    sorry if i have said anything 2 hurt ur feeling...i just wanted 2 be honest...

    also want 2 say ur an AMAZING author...plz continue 2 write storie like these coz u r truly talented

    i have another request 2 u that PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ UPDATE "KUMAARI".....it is my favourite ff and i have been waiting for months 4 u 2 update...looking forward 2 ur reply....take care and be happy

    YOUR NO. READER :)
    KITTY

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    1. Thank u for leaving a comment. I'll try to surprise u as much as I can. Next I will update Khumaari but cannot say when

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  4. I don't want this ff to have sad ending..
    maan and nitika can't die.
    and dadima she always wanted to get rid of manan and geet.
    and that she did..
    now manan and the new baby is all they have for each other.
    manan understanding her maa pain..
    plz don't kill maan.

    but atleast geet have shaan with her in this difficult time.

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  5. Maams alive or eles dadiji wouldn't have beer so impatient to get rid of feet.
    Happy ending ab dey bhi do na.My life could use a happy ending right now :)

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  6. Take ur time dear we"ll wait fr updates :)
    Thanks a lot fr gvng us Mindblowing update treat ..
    loved it a lot&lot :)
    Sona :)

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  7. Im feeling like u snatched a candy from a kid -_-
    Damn!!! What the hell is happening???!,
    How can maan n niks die!!!
    Thats all made up by dadima na???
    Wheres dev n deepika now?? :/
    Who plant the bomb mr.c or dev???
    Geet came to shaan with manan!!!
    Will she be with him ???

    Damn very cruel of u -_-
    Y u stopped here!!!!! :'(
    Plz plz plz if u can spare some minutes also thn do write it :(

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  8. Awesome awesome I just can't imagine geets pain she is already broken n ppl in her past n around her still trying to broke her in pieces !!em sure maan isn't dead or something I hope he get well soon come for geet !!it was really painful to see him suffering whenever he get to know geet left him !!he is right he can always find her no one can separate them I hope he get well soon !!

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  9. I guess maan still doesn't know about his baby !!Dadima I so hate her she is such a manipulative woman !if dadima wasn't in update I would have believed k maan n niki died but seeing dadima n her telling geet to get lost n about manan em sure she is a mastermind behind all this !!I hope she doesn't tell lie to maan that geet is dead let's see !I hope u write it soon because dieing to read it further

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  10. looking for a happy ending!
    Love your story but this part has left me depressed.Maaneet ko milo do please.:'(
    Pretty pretty pretty please .I've never request any person soo much :-o

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  11. All the updates were like a toilet coaster rude so much thing happened in a span of just few days maan and niks are nearly dead and I think geet went to dhawan with her son and I think she will leave the country

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  12. What a set of updates...Canot believe maan and nikita are dead....poor people...geet again all alone but this time with manan and her and maan baby...what is sh going to do....is maan really dead???

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  13. Dadima is so cruel.. she is really.. they are like.. self boasting people.. I hope Maan n Nikita both are fine.. N Geet has gone to Shaan for help.. yes to whom she will turn.. there is noone other than Shaan.. But Manan he is cute n so sensible baby.. not for Geet but dadi has really crossed it by sending Maanan too away.. she is such aheartless lady.. if she would have behaved bad with geet I can understand but with lil kid like cute n innocent Manan too... What's gonna to happen next.. teju biting her nails.. plz plz update soon..

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  14. i m crying... so painful... i dont like this dadimaa.. i m sure maan is alive... i hope shaan will stay as a true friend n help her...

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  15. oowh gosh!!! I really forgot that you have been updating this story on your blog!! I read till Part 36 and then forgot, been looking update at IF... I have 20 parts to Follow now...

    ajenn

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    1. I updated all the 20 parts in last week only....

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  16. i thought u left this story midway and i haven't checked ur blog for a while and when i checked today i was pleasantly surprised.but after reading all parts i feel very bad for maaneet.if u have planned a sad ending i'll not ask u to change it.but this is the best maaneet story i've read and it will remain the same.my only request to u is keep writing always.love u

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  17. I'm quite speechless. I don't know what to even type. My thoughts are all over the place.

    I knew Dadima is heartless and a cool blooded bitch still it shocked me to see her getting rid of Manan at the first opportunity she got. Can a person really not feel even an ounce of emotion? Her grandchildren just died and the first thing she did was get rid of Manan and Geet? What a supreme class of bitch.

    I felt so bad for Manan and Geet. But mostly that child who lost everything yet again but doesn't even know about it. How will Geet manage now? Herself, her baby and Manan?

    I don't want to believe Maan or either Nikita are dead. Please no. I love Nikita as well and her dead would be as hard for me to accept as that of Maan. Since Maan is a hero there is a possibility he would be alive but Nikita?

    You left us at cliffhanger. What a point to stop and your banked updates to finish. Like no. Please. You can't leave us at such a cruel point of the story and say you don't know when you're going to update next.

    The back to back updates have been a roller coaster ride for me in all sense. So thank you for updating it.

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    1. Thanks to u, Sanjana... you hav made me really happy wid ur lovely comments.

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  18. Very sad and dad is truly eeeehh now what waiting for the next update (neel11)

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  19. just completed reading from part 38 to 56 phew!! finally i am done. i had lost track of this amazing story when you had once mentioned on IF that you are blank right now and don't know how to take forward the story and then you just disappeared. you know me as ns.1 on india-forums, my wordpess id is neha74 and on facebook i have send you a friend request as Maangeet Mg. so please do remember me now. coming back the the story what a rollar coaster ride maaneet had and geet's past coming back again and again to haunt her. the only good thing that happened to geet was her maan, his sister nikita and their son manan and her good friend shaan.loved maaneet moments with manan the adorable cutie pie but again happiness doesn't stay with geet for long, first geet reveals her dreadful past to maan expecting him to ate her but that didn't happen and then dev again blackmails her. geet once again leaves maan for good after revealing all the truth about her betrayal to him and helping dev in a letter but again nikita and maan find her. she is pregnant and wants to share this news with maan but again destiny plays cruel and separate these two lovers. the twist is very shocking and painful bringing geet again to square one but this time with two children one her manan and another her unborn baby. maan cannot die, its daadi's dirty evil plan for sure to get rid of geet and manan and then tell maan that geet died in that blast but please don't make it more painful and don't separate maaneet. i have been crying since last 3 parts. if anyone has to go it has to be dev and daadi and i jus feel like killing the old lady with my bare hands. waiting for more but don't prolong this sad phase of maaneet's life. i want to see them happy with their children, away from all their enemies and specially daadi and dev.

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    1. yeah, I will remember u babes :D thanks for commenting

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  20. Even after dis update... i still cant believe maan and nikita are actualy dead....
    Until now .....in all the problems....it was always maan who has been the saviour.....no matter how big of a trouble.... he has always helped geet out of it.....its like he is a man who cannot lose.....like he is a super hero
    If it would have been geet in  maan s place....i would have got convinced.....so may be dat s y its difficult for me to accept ......anyways coming to d update....my emotions are all mixed up.....anger at dadi ma....pity for manan......sadness seeing geet so helpless and in so much pain....
    ....i dunno i still wish maan comes back somehow...... may be because i want to see geet having a happily ever after because of all dat she has gone through...but seems like she has so many more trials.....
    Anyways..... u have written only till here......u are leaving us hanging on a cliff untill u write the next  update......
    I wish u come back soon and find ur motivation to write..not only for dis but also for khumaari......all the very best for dat......!!!!!....
    And yes osheen ....may i know ur name...??..wat u do.....u can message me in fb...find me by the name nishath sabeen in friend list  ...just wanted to know u ....so let me know if u want to....:):).....

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    1. My real name is Osheen n I'm a student. You r a terrific reader, thanks for your insightful comments. :) I'll catch up wid u on fb.

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  21. I just finished reading your story and I am glad that i came across your link in IF today

    I loved the story the enticing flow the gripping characterisation and above all the feel of love...I feel the ache of geet's heart how much can it endure it seems fate has some personal grudge with her happiness...Maan has the only light in her darkened world to see him in pain because of her past is really unbearable

    My fingers are crossed and I hope Maan is fine somewhere planning to rescue his damsel of darkness and bring her back to life

    I will be patiently waiting for the next part of the story...till then if you can suggest which other stories of your I should read to keep myself happy with your dose of maan and geet


    Also just so that you know my IF I'd is Inertia14

    Love
    Ayu

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    1. Hello ayu, thanks for commenting, its lovely. You can read my Milan- The final destination, Khumaari- Beauty with the beast, or Bezuba... All these r complete n on IF/Blog :)

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  22. Loved all the parts! U stopped at such a crucial point!! I shudder to think what happened to maan and Nikita... Same tragedy cannot struck twice!! Geet can't be alone once again... Please don't say u don't know when u will update at this point in the story... Give us a peep into what lies ahead. I really hope both r alive. Niks is such a lovable character in this story. Loved every bit of ur updates

    Pls update soon and thanks for all your hardwork.

    Dolly

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  23. Lovin this story :D
    What a crucial point ! Is Maan n Nii really dead ?
    Geet is pregnant n took Manan with her,, mushkil me dost hi kaam aate hain :)
    She is at Shaan's place

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  24. Mera doosra comment kahan gya :'(

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  25. You've got to b kidding :'( u cannot stop there please !!! damn what the hell just happened Geet left with Manan & Dadima keeps reiterating that Maan & Niks are dead :/ :( plz I hope that's untrue so she leaves with them to get a few things & goes to Shaan's . Poor Manan :'( man I hope Maan & Niks are safe
    what a turn of events & ur banked parts end here !!! -_-
    *sigh*

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  26. Dadima is not leaving a chance to taunt Geet as being the reason of death of Maan and Nikita. She wants to get rid of Geet as soon as possible, she doesn’t want anything to do with Geet to be around them anymore. And worst part, she want to send Manan to orphanage?? How cruel and heartless this old lady could get? Why is she punishing Manan. I’m glad Geet plan to raise Manan by herself.
    Geet is no longer the old self and Manan to realise it. She’s not talking or smiling like she used to be. And Manan have start missing his father. He have been questioning about Manan every now and then and will do that continuously, wonder how will Geet explain to Manan that Maan is no more. But a part of me isn’t willing to believe it, I still think Dadima is hiding something…
    Dadima made Geet pack all her stuff from their place and go away very far. But Geet doesn’t know where she needs to go and what she have to do next. She needs to take care of their unborn baby and Manan now…
    The only person she knows apart from Maan is Nikita whom is no more and Shaan.


    ajenn

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  27. this is one of d best maneet stories & what i'm attracted 2 is maan's pure unselfish love, which is transcending d boundaries of norms in real life, & i'm in love with that, not 2 forget shaan a friend in uncertain & times of need is a friend worth in gold. a friend like shaan is what everyone wants in life

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  28. omg never expected something like this was about to come....Have always loved this story of yours..But i haate sad endings and i hope ki this one wont have one. I am feeling terrible for maaneet n niks too...
    Honeygrape.

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  29. i know that woman is lying about maan & nikita's death. They must be alive but she wants geet to be away from them that's why she is saying those venom to her.
    Geet along with manan seek out help from shaan. i hope maan came at right time to her rescue.

    IF id: impoojaverma

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  30. OMG!!so much sadness in maaneet's life....please don't have try to give sad endings to them....they have suffered a lot and it would be unfair if they don't get their happily ever after....hope maan returns soon...

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  31. read all parts from part 38.....

    what can I say just crying....loss of words.....it was heart wrenching when Geet shared her past with Maan.....I was crying like hell....so much she went through.... after enduring so much she still don't get peace....

    now Maan and Nikita dead and Daadi throw her out with Manan is very heart breaking.....but please don't let Maan and Nikita dead.....I hope it is Daadi's plotting to make her leave....

    waiting for further story....

    thanx for pm....

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  32. My comment fr khumari latest part actually :p I couldn't comment der due to phone net issue....

    Thanks for updating osheen... Hugs... Read a,maneet story after a long tym... Which story could have been better then your stories?!

    Love ya

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  33. Part 56
    How cruel dadi was. She made geet to go from their life, reminding again again that she killed maan & niki. Somewhere feel that ke dadi was lying. Maan & niki were safe or recovering. Why divya said nothing, she doesn’t know anything..? Dadi told that she will send manan to orphanage. Glad geet agreed to take him with her. How she will cope up with two children. She came to shaan for help. At least he will readily help her when she really needs him.
    I want to ask has maan left nothing in her name so that she can live her life on that.
    Pl come back soon and write more parts. So eager to know what will happen next.

    IF - Madhuri53

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  34. Sorry for late comments. Was busy that time and then could get time with other updates. Now will check regularly your site for updates.

    IF - Madhuri53

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  35. What an amazing update. I don't know when i started crying reading it.u made me cry and now u have give happy update as well waiting so eagerly

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  36. It's a great story
    Read all in one go please continue soon
    Is maan and her sister really died
    Feeling so painful for geet
    Hope she will not go to her priviouse life

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  37. Hey.When will you update?Still waiting for this story :'(
    please update for me :(

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  39. 2 years and still waiting ..hope you are fine
    please come back soon
    sobia

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  41. when you going update next part

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